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What journalistic cliches really piss you off?

I hate it when a film/TV critic uses a metaphor based on the subject matter of the thing they're reviewing. Two examples from this weeks Guardian Guide:

On Pushing Tin (A film about air traffic controllers):

"...conventions of the plot bring it down to earth a little at the end, but otherwise it's smooth flying."

On Six Feet under:

"You'd have to be an actual stiff not to love this."

Why do they employ these people?

Wooden (Wooden), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:28 (twenty-one years ago)

It's called "Fun" wooden, why do you hate it?

Huck, Monday, 16 August 2004 14:30 (twenty-one years ago)

check http://www.campaigndesk.org for plenty of examples of critiques of lazy writing covering the U.S. Presidential election...

it's a great site, put together by the Columbia Journalism Review folks

Lt. Kingfish Del Pickles (Kingfish), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:32 (twenty-one years ago)

i don't think it's laziness so much as believing that's the way reviews are supposed to be done.

g--ff (gcannon), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:32 (twenty-one years ago)

it's thread and thrum really

ken c (ken c), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:33 (twenty-one years ago)

It's not fun. It's tedious and insulting. Waterslides are fun. Drinking beer is fun.

Wooden (Wooden), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:35 (twenty-one years ago)

I blame Shalit.

http://casa.colorado.edu/~jcollins/shalit.gif

SHAAAALIIIIIITTT!!!

Harold Media (kenan), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:37 (twenty-one years ago)

So you'd be happier if a reviewer used nautical metaphors for a review of a movie about trains?

Huck, Monday, 16 August 2004 14:40 (twenty-one years ago)

If such a thing were to occur I could die happy.

Wooden (Wooden), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:42 (twenty-one years ago)

"this runaway train floats like a paper cup!"

"garden state certainly is the catch of the day!"

amateur!!!st, Monday, 16 August 2004 14:44 (twenty-one years ago)

"Murder on the Orient Express" leaves the dock in a timely fashion, but lays down anchor in the Bermuda Triangle.

na (Nick A.), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:44 (twenty-one years ago)

Now I can die happy.

Wooden (Wooden), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:45 (twenty-one years ago)

"Titanic jumps the rails in its last hour."

Harold Media (kenan), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:45 (twenty-one years ago)

"you'll never catch this phantom menace flying a white flag!"

amateur!!!st, Monday, 16 August 2004 14:46 (twenty-one years ago)

Oh so many, but my personal pet peeve of all time is the dreaded "dictionary lede," aka "Webster's defines 'torture' as . . . ." If I read that in some freelance candidate's clip packet, I stop reading right there and file them in the "Do not contact under any circumstance" pile.

Lee G (Lee G), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:47 (twenty-one years ago)

One-line reviews for Wooden:

Titanic: All clear for take-off!
Murder On the Orient Express: Rough waters ahead in latest Agatha Christie shipwreck!
Pirates of the Caribbean: Stays on-track!
Planes, Trains & Automobiles: More fun than a weekend in bed with comic books!
My Step-Mother Is An Alien: Merry Christmas, Julie Andrews!
Sex, Lies & Videotape: Houston, We Have a Hit!
Showgirls: Don't forgot your sunscreen!

Huck, Monday, 16 August 2004 14:48 (twenty-one years ago)

I once reviewed Errol Morris' one diasterous stab at fiction film, an adaptation of Tony Hillerman's The Dark Wind starring Lou Diamond Phillips, and was thrilled to atoms to be able to wind up with, "Simply put, The Dark Wind blows." If that's wrong, I don't wanna be right.

Lee G (Lee G), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:51 (twenty-one years ago)

"The Dark Wind is a whale of a hit!"

Harold Media (kenan), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:52 (twenty-one years ago)

http://members.cox.net/chuxwords/dali.gif

Harold Media (kenan), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:52 (twenty-one years ago)

Or "disasterous," even.

Lee G (Lee G), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:53 (twenty-one years ago)

How many Alien vs. Predator reviews mentioned the films tagline ("Whoever wins, we lose" or something like that) and then turn it into a snarky reference about the audience losing? Answer: at least a couple.

na (Nick A.), Monday, 16 August 2004 14:53 (twenty-one years ago)

In my capsule thingy for the paper's movie listings I wrote: A predatory race of aliens pits battle against an alien race of predators at the South Pole.

Huck, Monday, 16 August 2004 14:58 (twenty-one years ago)

this thread title makes me think of "lazy river": "up the lazy river, by the old mill run / that lazy, lazy river, in the noonday sun"

amateur!!!st, Monday, 16 August 2004 15:00 (twenty-one years ago)

i noticed and was annoyed by the dictionary thing this very weekend. they've also gone modern and have started using google for the same thing.

koogs (koogs), Monday, 16 August 2004 15:06 (twenty-one years ago)

"Searching British Middle Class on google image search you'll find many results, including a flaccid penis on the first page, the momentum of the roles of the Middle Class Britain has in a sense too become flaccid...." etc.

ken c (ken c), Monday, 16 August 2004 15:13 (twenty-one years ago)

the two in question:

http://observer.guardian.co.uk/screen/story/0,6903,1283171,00.html

"but if you type 'the Fulfords' into Google you currently end up with page after page of (f***ing) estate agents, though probably not for very much longer."

http://observer.guardian.co.uk/review/story/0,6903,1283233,00.html
(which manages to do both)

"The Oxford English dictionary defines a guerrilla as 'a member of a small independently acting group taking part in irregular fighting, esp. against large regular forces'. Type the word into any search engine, however, and you quickly get the sense that its old belligerent connotations are being nudged to one side. Battle fatigues, bullet belts and Marxism are nowhere to be seen; instead, the latter-day guerrilla is likely to be an advocate of a very modern, self-motivated creativity. As five minutes on Google proves, the term's use spans the arts - it may only be a matter of time before someone stages the first guerrilla opera."

grrrr

koogs (koogs), Monday, 16 August 2004 15:37 (twenty-one years ago)

there was a good example of bad writing in today's Metro, in their review of Natasha Bedingfield's new song. I can't remember how it went, but it made me slightly annoyed.

jel -- (jel), Monday, 16 August 2004 15:39 (twenty-one years ago)

Koogs OTM about google. My favourite is when they say "A search on google reveals that there are 5,800,686 Michael Jackson websites."

I haven't seen anyone use the dictionary definition lead in a long time. I thought it was a high school essay cliché outlawed many years ago.

Alba (Alba), Monday, 16 August 2004 15:41 (twenty-one years ago)

I haven't seen anyone use the dictionary definition lead in a long time. I thought it was a high school essay cliché outlawed many years ago.

You might be surprised.

And OTM about Google lede = new dictionary lede.

Lee G (Lee G), Monday, 16 August 2004 15:45 (twenty-one years ago)

I am pleased to see that nonce words feature so highly in Google's pages of results.

Alba (Alba), Monday, 16 August 2004 17:40 (twenty-one years ago)

http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&lr=&ie=UTF-8&q=%2B%22funk+%26+wagnalls+defines%22

Monetizing Eyeballs (diamond), Monday, 16 August 2004 17:45 (twenty-one years ago)

http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&lr=&ie=UTF-8&q=%2B%22my+mom+defines%22

Alba (Alba), Monday, 16 August 2004 17:49 (twenty-one years ago)

If that's wrong, I don't wanna be right.

It's wrong. Yes, there are some amateurish moments - the boom falling into camera-view - but I like it a lot. I imagine that you object to the slow pacing and simplicity, which I take (gladly) as a reflection of Navajo life.

gabbneb (gabbneb), Monday, 16 August 2004 18:03 (twenty-one years ago)

I was talking about the quip, not the film, which was crap IMHO.

Lee G (Lee G), Monday, 16 August 2004 18:05 (twenty-one years ago)

In my capsule thingy for the paper's movie listings I wrote: A predatory race of aliens pits battle against an alien race of predators at the South Pole.

nice one

Lt. Kingfish Del Pickles (Kingfish), Monday, 16 August 2004 20:17 (twenty-one years ago)

to thread: every single 'entertainment weekly' photo caption

andrew l. r. (allocryptic), Monday, 16 August 2004 20:56 (twenty-one years ago)

A predatory race of alien predators preying on their predatory alien predator prey.

Jordan (Jordan), Monday, 16 August 2004 21:13 (twenty-one years ago)

"To those of you who had pegged the Prodigy as the remnants of a disinherited electro race, think again. After the non-event that was ‘Baby’s Got A Temper’, with its dodgy casino riff and lyrics about bad drugs, Liam Howlett returns to the fray without his erstwhile bandmates. Seemingly intent on undoing the damage caused by the band’s disastrous non-event of a comeback, the boy Howlett sounds eager to counter claims that the Prodigy have been on the verge of self-parody for some time.

For an album that was effectively seven years in the making, Always Outnumbered, Never Outgunned is about as Zeitgeist-y as it gets. ‘Spitfire’ is a fantastically bootylicious slice of mayhem, and like Aphex Twin’s ‘Windowlicker’, ‘Girls’ is a hugely infectious ode to high-octane smut. In short, the album is consistently refreshing and neatly experimental, although the collaboration with brother-in-law Liam Gallagher on ‘Shoot Down’ is just plain bizarre. Not in a good way either.

Add to that Howlett’s other collaborators (Princess Superstar, Kool Keith, Juliette Lewis and Twista), and you get an insight into the many stylistic directions in which he wants to take the album.

As Fat Of The Land’s follow-up, this album was always going to be something of a statement of intent. Always Outnumbered, Never Outgunned makes for wonderfully vital listening.

Tanya Sweeney
Rating: 8½ / 10"

Ronan (Ronan), Monday, 16 August 2004 21:13 (twenty-one years ago)

B-b-b-b-ut that's how I write! :-( Especially using "non-event" twice.

dog latin (dog latin), Tuesday, 17 August 2004 07:01 (twenty-one years ago)

T.Sweeney's piece is a really good example of the sneaky bad-writing-by-stealth approach. Some of the things that upset me about it:

1. The readership is addressed in the plural. It's possible more than one person is reading it but readers don't think of themselves as being multiple entities.
2. "To those of you who thought X, think again" is a cliché.
3. "the boy Howlett". Ick.
4. "X years in the making" is a cliché.
5. "In short" is inelegant.
6. So is "you get an insight into the many stylistic directions in which he wants to take the album."
7. "makes for" should be replaced with "is" and "wonderfully vital listening" is hideous.

Not sure why I typed all this up but once I started I couldn't stop.

beanz (beanz), Tuesday, 17 August 2004 07:32 (twenty-one years ago)

"Wonderfully Vitalite" wd haf been better but possibly COPYRIGHT ISSUES re name for spreadable gooey junk.

Quite frankly I have been on the Str4nge Fru1t mailing list for years tho and haf therefore seen all examples of worst-writing in the world ever so that Prodigy wotsit seems palatable to me.

Of course it is all spelt entirely inkorrektly.

nervous, Tuesday, 17 August 2004 07:39 (twenty-one years ago)

When I was an editor at my college paper, I had one movie reviewer who was incapable of writing without at least one cliche per paragraph. She never understood why I thought cliches were bad. "Everyone understands what they mean," she said. "That's what they're there for." (Of course, she undermined her own argument by often using the cliches inappropriately, suggesting that "everyone" didn't include her.)

spittle (spittle), Tuesday, 17 August 2004 19:52 (twenty-one years ago)

I think I've used "makes for" and "in short" properly.

Sterling Clover (s_clover), Tuesday, 17 August 2004 23:43 (twenty-one years ago)

in short: breezes

jed_ (jed), Wednesday, 18 August 2004 01:12 (twenty-one years ago)


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