Will some of you help me and please read this rather short (1 page) English summary of my MA thesis? It should take you no more than 2 minutes!

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As some of you from over at ILM may know, I am from Denmark. I study rhetoric at the University of Copenhagen, and I am handing in my Master Degree Thesis this Friday. A one page English summary is required for the assignment, and I would be very grateful if one or two of you would just eye it through for language. Comments would be more than welcome.

Thanks, thanks, thanks in advance. You will be in my thoughts (really!) when I hand in the sucker the day after tomorrow.

6. SUMMARY IN ENGLISH

This Master's Degree thesis is an investigation into one of the most aggressive disputes in modern Danish political history. The dispute was ignited by right-wing politician Ulla Dahlerup's speech at Dansk Folkeparti's (The Danish People's Party) annual congress 2003. In the speech, she fero-ciously attacked the Danish left and the intellectual elite. Soon, that same elite responded with a number of fierce letters, published in leading Danish broadsheet newspapers.

The point of the thesis is to go beyond the sheer personal attacks and thoroughly ana-lyse the more complex rhetorical dynamics, which contributed to the debate's hostile climate. This includes analysing the speech itself, the responses it provoked, and the press coverage of the debate.

Using Dutch theoreticians Frans H. van Eemeren and Rob Grootendort's pragma-dialectial rules for reasonableness in discussion, it becomes clear that Dahlerup doesn't really re-spect the opinion of others – in facts, she tries to hijack the truth: she appeals very heavily to pity, and she tends to represent her opponents' standpoints very unjustly, and to her own advantage. She often presupposes that her own world-view was universally valid, she refers to herself as an author-ity when it was dubious to do so, and she doesn't distinguish between her opponents when she ought to. All this is intensified by her extremely vivid and emotional use of metaphors.

On the other hand, her opponents respond in a both high-pitched and superior tone: They disrespectfully attack her person with great vigour, they misrepresent her and others' stand-points, they try to impose their own world-view upon their audience, and they lack clarity in lan-guage – often because of presuppositions which seemingly serves as a form of showing off. Also, they exaggerate the consequences or magnitude of their opponents' standpoints.

The debate was further polarized by the press: Firstly, an investigation inspired by American linguist Deborah Tannen's work yielded the fact that most Danish broadsheet newspapers used a variety of war metaphors in their coverage of the debate. And secondly, applying communi-cation professor Kathleen Hall Jamieson and editor Paul Waldman's concepts of lenses and frames on the coverage of the debate shows us that the newspapers weren't merely objective bystanders: Sometimes the journalists' self-image as unmaskers of strategy and pinpointers of debate led them to stage the debate as simple one-on-one fights, even when that wasn't at all in accordance with the truth. These journalistic tendencies most likely contributed to the debate's fight-like atmosphere.

The thesis shows how journalistic aggression and debaters' lack of respect for the counterpart can corrupt dialogue and thereby cause a serious democratic problem.

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:17 (twenty-one years ago)

There seems to be a surfeit of dashes.

Michael White (Hereward), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:20 (twenty-one years ago)

right, i'll fix that, thanks!

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:21 (twenty-one years ago)

"sheer personal attacks" - I would say "mere" personal attacks.

"She often presupposes that her own world-view was universally valid" - Unintentional tense change?

"she refers to herself as an author-ity when it was dubious to do so" - And again the tense.

"On the other hand, her opponents respond in a both high-pitched and superior tone:" - Do you really mean "high-pitched" here?

"often because of presuppositions which seemingly serves as a form of showing off" - "serve"

"concepts of lenses and frames on the coverage of the debate shows" - "show"

"The thesis shows how journalistic aggression and debaters' lack of respect for the counterpart" - Their counterparts? Not sure what you mean here.

Laura E (laurae55), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:25 (twenty-one years ago)

THANKS
THANKS
THANKS
THANKS
LAURA!

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:27 (twenty-one years ago)

I will ask you, about my dissertation stuff, when it is time, laura e.

feel free not to reply.

RJG (RJG), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:27 (twenty-one years ago)

high-pitched is usually rendered as 'shrill' in standard American political cant.

Michael White (Hereward), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:27 (twenty-one years ago)

P.S. Will you marry me?

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:28 (twenty-one years ago)

"The point of this thesis" seems a bit wrong, somehow. I'd prefer 'aim'.

In the same sentence, "sheer" sounds funny. Maybe "purely". Also, what do mean about "going beyond" those attacks?

"in facts, she tries to hijack the truth" is odd. At first I thought you meant the idiomatic "in fact", but then I decided you meant "when it comes to facts". Is that right?

I prefer "first" and "second" to "firstly" and "secondly", though I'm not sure why. Also, I wouldn't capitalize after a colon.

There are a lot of stray hyphens in there, but I expect you can see that.

x-posts - much already covered.

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:31 (twenty-one years ago)

Aw, it was no problem Jay K. :)

And I'd be glad to a look, RJG. I actually miss editing.

Laura E (laurae55), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:32 (twenty-one years ago)

ALBA
THANKS - MUCH APPRECIATED!!!

(i meant: "in fact")

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:34 (twenty-one years ago)

no, really, laura and alba, you are very kind.

dunno what happened to the hyphens, but they're ok in my word document.

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:37 (twenty-one years ago)

This Master's Degree thesis . "This thesis ..." is sufficient.
and she doesn't distinguish between her opponents when she ought to. It's the ol' "don't end a sentence with a preposition" rule (although, is "to" considered a preposition here) ... still, I suggest breaking up this long sentence into two, something like (ignoring Laura's corrections for now):

"She often presupposes that her own world-view was universally valid and she refers to herself as an authority when it was dubious to do so. Furthermore, she ought to distinguish between her opponents but does not"

MindInRewind (Barry Bruner), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:44 (twenty-one years ago)

THANKS a lot to you, too, MiR!

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:49 (twenty-one years ago)

Oh, and drop the "And" from before the "secondly".

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:51 (twenty-one years ago)

done.

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 15:52 (twenty-one years ago)

Thanks, everybody. I'll go ahead and print it, unless there's any last-minute attempts to save me from embarrassment.

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:34 (twenty-one years ago)

Shouldn't dialectial early in the third paragraph be dialectical? Not that I am up on philosophical terms, so I may be wrong.

Martin Skidmore (Martin Skidmore), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:46 (twenty-one years ago)

Also, would:

"All this is intensified by her use of extremely vivid and emotional metaphors"

be more accurate than

"All this is intensified by her extremely vivid and emotional use of metaphors."?

Can a metaphor be emotional itself?

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:49 (twenty-one years ago)

it's called "transferred epithet".

RJG (RJG), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:51 (twenty-one years ago)

Anyway, I'm kind of arguing with myself here, so ignore me.

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:54 (twenty-one years ago)

I think you're right, about it.

RJG (RJG), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:55 (twenty-one years ago)

Maybe "her use of extremely vivid and emotionally-charrged metaphors."

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:55 (twenty-one years ago)

emotionally-charred?

RJG (RJG), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:57 (twenty-one years ago)

sometimes, I feel that way.

RJG (RJG), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:57 (twenty-one years ago)

Alba is channeling his inner pirate.

Michael White (Hereward), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 16:58 (twenty-one years ago)

you are being very helpful here. thanks to you martin and michael, too.

Jay Kid (Jay K), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 17:07 (twenty-one years ago)

I am trying to think of a pilates/pirates joke for some reason. I fear it will involve the Japanese.

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 17:14 (twenty-one years ago)

Alba, you're delightfully gnomic sometimes.

Michael White (Hereward), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 17:22 (twenty-one years ago)

I was going to post a picture of a gnome to another thread, earlier on today, but thought better off it. Actually, it was a midget.

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 17:24 (twenty-one years ago)

Was he gnomely?

Leon Czolgosz (Nicole), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 18:05 (twenty-one years ago)

I'm not even sure I know what a gnome is anymore.

Alba (Alba), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 18:07 (twenty-one years ago)

Isn't it a city in Nalaska?

Michael White (Hereward), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 18:17 (twenty-one years ago)

Errr. Galaska, that is.

Michael White (Hereward), Wednesday, 27 October 2004 18:17 (twenty-one years ago)


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