This Be the Verse

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yeah but sometimes the process that drives you to choose the word doesn't mean it's not the right word

Xp

i think that happy conjunction of meaning, fit and sound is why it’s good! deepens like a coastal shelf works as a stand-alone image for me ymmv / de gustibus

wot NV said. the constraints of poetry produce these moments.

Ya it's acknowledged as a personal thing

Automatic thread bump. This poll's results are now in.

Strong showing for the last verse, 4 of the top 5.

Also I have much love for some parents, but lol at the other line in the top five being "but not me, right, guys?"

Think the votes for "They may not mean to, but they do." was based on double-meaning, as discussed upthread

Yeah it's very much a line that can be read as apology or condemnation or just a shrug all of which came up itt

The Verse This Be

It deepens like a coastal shelf.
And don’t have any kids yourself.
Man hands on misery to man.
They may not mean to, but they do.

Get out as early as you can,
They fuck you up, your mum and dad.
Who half the time were soppy-stern
By fools in old-style hats and coats,

But they were fucked up in their turn
And add some extra, just for you.
They fill you with the faults they had
And half at one another’s throats.

hahah sick

Excellent

ha wrote itself rly

A good idea need only be done half-well

nice

Kudos

We should poll more poems and do the same.