At 10:35 on an early summer's morning, John Lanchester sat down at his study desk, switched on his new Dell computer, opened up the word processing programme that the computer had come with and began

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ha ha, i can't stop re-reading that previous paragraph.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:05 (six years ago) link

what if kindle, but count magnus

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:06 (six years ago) link

I had a choice of panel sessions on a range of unappealing topics <- these very much don't exist do they? i mean i'm very glad Lanchester didn't exert himself to list them, but these are simply pasteboard words.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:07 (six years ago) link

...unplugged my earpiece from the radio that was carrying the translation

classic lanchester

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:10 (six years ago) link

wait is it choice OF or choice BETWEEN? RUMBLED fizzles you are just making these up i knew it

illegal economic migration (Tracer Hand), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:11 (six years ago) link

I am starting to experience some measure of suspense

the ghost of tom, choad (thomp), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:12 (six years ago) link

ok elephant in the room

- norms! -

so totally freed from context the effect is like someone random coming up to you in the street suddenly and shouting norms! at you. it takes you a while to settle down and realise he means 'social norms' but some time did pass while i considered whether he meant some sort of weird insult ('normies!'). and it's so free from meaning (you do kind of need 'social' there), that briefly a set of beings like the moomins came into my head, sort of shapeless furless balls of grey.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:15 (six years ago) link

lol i thought it meant "normal" like adorbs means adorable

i noticed you have skated right past my question about because vs of

illegal economic migration (Tracer Hand), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:18 (six years ago) link

he's seems to have set himself a weird double-task: on one hand, he's made the narrator a pompous idiot, on the other, he wants to guy -- if more gently than sokal -- this kind of conference and paper

but of course if CANON [insert hungarian name here]'S APP BOOK is a thing, then the werewolves&ghosts paper is on the right track after all -- so all yr really poking fun it is poor (as in mannered) approach to language, which erm

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:21 (six years ago) link

oh wait, you're right! ha ha. fizzles rewrites lanchester rewrites dickens.

i'm typing from the paper copy rather than doing the sensible thing, which using the shortcut keys on my portable laptop to copy and paste sections of text from the original website of a literary journal where the story had been published.

CORRECTION:

I had a choice between panel sessions on a range of unappealing topics

choice between ... on a range...? lanchester i'm saving your ass here, you'd better come thank me when i'm done. (tho choice between ... a range isn't really disastrous i guess).

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:23 (six years ago) link

mark s otm.

tho i wd say that mocking the narrator and that which the narrator mocks is legit, it just takes a load more skill, and a much much better choice of targets. i mean actual targets rather than just stuff that's skimmed in op-eds.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:25 (six years ago) link

if they were all unappealing why is the one he (randomly) chose a mistake? or is this foreshadowing of some kind?

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:27 (six years ago) link

Dickens's knowledge of the processes of ageing and dementia was, obviously, not scientifically modern, but to a surprising extent he still had an evidentiary basis for some of his fictionalised account. Cf the narcoleptic boy in The Pickwick Papers. Obviously a fully modern knowledge of these areas would have made Dickens a more complete writer.

did JL just leave a draft note to himself in there?

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:29 (six years ago) link

[insert effective sentence here]

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:30 (six years ago) link

i don't think it's foreshadowing. he also somehow conveys (I think via 'turned out to be called') that the one he randomly went into wasn't one of the ones in the 'range of unappealing topics' that he looked at earlier.

if that does turn out to be foreshadowing, then you might almost suggest some authorial subtlety there.

i don't think it's foreshadowing.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:33 (six years ago) link

ha ha yes exactly.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:33 (six years ago) link

there's a huge bit of Lanchestered Great Expectations coming up.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:35 (six years ago) link

just to pause for a moment, as with Capital, it's extraordinary how badly proportioned his writing is. perhaps it's to do with those pasteboard words earlier. he labours through everything that comes into his mind, so you have huge chunks of stuff. his lack of economy is in fact a lack of ability to use or rely on inference. if it's in his head, it's going down. nothing is purposefully left out.

i remember in Capital plot points or subjects would just be dropped and picked up without any meaning much later on. I remember Matt DC saying that the book doesn't end, it just sort of stops.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:38 (six years ago) link

between / a range is typical of his problems in that it acts like a pebble throwing your bike slightly off course; by the time you reach the end of the graf the cumulative effect has wrapped the bike completely around your neck

illegal economic migration (Tracer Hand), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:39 (six years ago) link

ok, deep breath.

Pip had made his visit to Miss Havisham and was leaving her premises after being frightened boy Estalla's cruel game with an effigy. It had woken superstitious feelings in him, which Dickens, if my memory served (it usually does), cleverly renders vivid without endorsing any nonsense of their supernatural origin.

Nothing less than the frosty light of the cheerful sky, the sight of people passing beyond the bars of the courtyard gate, and the reviving influence of the rest of the bread and meat and beer, would have brought me round. Even with those aids, I might not have come to myself as soon as I did, but that I saw Estella approaching with the keys, to let me out. She would have some fair reason for looking down upon me, I thought, if she saw me frightened; and she would have no fair reason.

She gave me a triumphant glance in passing me, as if she rejoiced that my hands were so coarse and my boots were so thick, and she opened the gate, and stood holding it. I was passing out without looking at her, when she touched me with a taunting hand.

‘Why don’t you cry?’

‘Because I don’t want to.’

‘You do,’ said she. ‘You have been crying till you are half blind, and you are near crying again now.’

She laughed contemptuously, pushed me out, and locked the gate upon me. I went straight to Mr Pumblechook’s, and was immensely relieved to find him not at home. So, leaving word with the shopman on what day I was wanted at Miss Havisham’s again, I set off on the four-mile walk to our forge; pondering, as I went along, on all I had seen, and deeply revolving that I was a common labouring-boy; that my hands were coarse; that my boots were thick; that I had fallen into a despicable habit of calling knaves Jacks; that I was much more ignorant than I had considered myself last night, and generally that I was in a low-lived bad way.

I was halfway home, with my spirits thus troubled, before I began to sense a presence behind me. I was possessed with a growing feeling of unease. The woes I had experienced that day made me reluctant to embrace a new source of disturbance but I could not shake off a desire to turn and look. My weariness was forgotten in a sudden surge of anxious energy. I turned my head and for a moment thought that my impression of being followed was nothing but the work of my imagination, still troubled by the encounter at Miss Havisham’s. Then, with a growing feeling of horror, I realised that my initial apprehensions were not mistaken. There was indeed a figure following me, a shape I had not seen at first glance because I was looking for a man standing or walking. This was neither standing nor walking, nor, perhaps, was it a man. At a distance of perhaps a hundred yards a shape was slithering towards me along the ground. It was moving with the propulsion of its arms, assisted by convulsions of its torso. It was neither crawling nor walking because it appeared to have no legs. Its face was largely shapeless but its mouth was open and it appeared to be exhaling, or hissing, with all the force in its lungs.

I turned and ran.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:42 (six years ago) link

I like the spark notes start that looks like it's just been converted from something like this:

Pip makes his visit to Miss Havisham and is leaving her premises after being frightened by Estalla's cruel game with an effigy.

(also correction 'by' for 'boy')

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:44 (six years ago) link

again, not too much that's exceptionable in that,

'made me reluctant to embrace a new source of disturbance' is a little odd, and 'slithering' seems odd but i can't quite work out why. feels out of place.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:47 (six years ago) link

there's a famous e.b.white explanation of a technically unnecessary comma in a new yorker short story sentence: "that's there to allow them to pull the chair out and sit down" or something like that

in other words, sentence content and rhythm as an analogue for the action described: with the old lady leaning on the stick before she comes towards him, or here with the mechanism of his random selection (which i take -- after some thought -- to mean he chooses a room at random, without confirming in advance which of the unappealing panels is to occur within, so topic is pot luck), he requires you to push your reading mind through a confused and confusing version of a REALLY SIMPLE activity, like approaching someone, or going into a room

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:48 (six years ago) link

x-post i guess, though merely an hommage to the master

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:48 (six years ago) link

i mean tbf to lanchester - writers do other writers is *hard*. you can always spot something. it's an interesting sub-genre, and it can tell you a fair bit about both writers i think.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:48 (six years ago) link

he requires you to push your reading mind through a confused and confusing version of a REALLY SIMPLE activity, like approaching someone, or going into a room

^ v much otm. this feels like this is one of those observations that needs to be collected as part of a set of conclusions.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:50 (six years ago) link

This was neither standing nor walking, nor, perhaps, was it a man

bad not good

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:51 (six years ago) link

not sure what makes me uneasy about this lovecraftian use of slither, which i take it after a quick look at the OED comes from its usage wrt to reptiles, which dates from the 1830s and so is legit.

interesting to see some of its non-unpleasant uses:

2. intr. To walk in a sliding manner; to slip along or away.

1848 A. H. Clough Bothie of Toper-na-Fuosich iv. 176 The streets of the dissolute city, Where dressy girls slithering-by upon pavements give sign for accosting.
1857 C. Kingsley Two Years Ago III. 183 Gay girls slithered past him, looked round at him, but in vain.
1894 H. Caine Manxman 36 Philip slithered softly through the dairy door.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:53 (six years ago) link

oh god, i paused briefly at that 'it was none of the things that it might have been' and the 'nor, perhaps' construction before passing it over. but you singling it out like that has had the true lanchester effect of me laughing going away, and then coming back to it like i've been hypnotised, and laughing some more, and then my heart starts to beat quite fast through a mixture of irritation and excitement as I realise it's yet another sentence which is a sort of semantic 'undoing' of understanding or thought.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 13:58 (six years ago) link

This passage made a very disagreeable impression on me

sez teh narrator after that excerpt. and on that note, i'm going to go and catch the two remaining rooms of the Kabakov exhibition i didn't see last week.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:01 (six years ago) link

it's the key to yr slithering problem i think

fake dickens has just expressed the calibrated doubt that this is a man, but simultaneously knows it DEFINITELY CAN'T BE A MAN bcz SLITHERING!*

hence the "perhaps" is misplaced (i suspect it's there for more for rhythm-of-uncertainity than semantics anyway -- i.e. he's trying to do "penwiper? no such thing in the house! a rat?" etc, the dawning of doubt… but as ever he gets it all in the wrong order

*with all due respect to the examples quoted (all i think semi-satirical observation-description, of movement in skirts, or of a reptile-type person)

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:02 (six years ago) link

Thread is doing so much to get me out of bed in the morning these horrific first days back at work, thanking all of u but most of all mr lancs, without whose taper we shadows would have no music to dance

Winter. Dickens. Yes. (Jon not Jon), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:08 (six years ago) link

xpost

yep, you've nailed the slithering problem.

tho i'm not sure about the semi-satirical/reptilian use in those examples - there are enough older uses of slither which are not to do with reptiles but to do with non-reptilian motion. however it's never *graceful* motion, so while the reptilian aspect *may* not be present, it's hard to see how there isn't some sort of satiric intent.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:09 (six years ago) link

yes, thanks John, for this winter sustenance you have provided.

the proportions of this analysis to the actual story remind me of VS Pritchett's observation about Wyndham Lewis, that he used an atom bomb to destroy a coconut shy.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:10 (six years ago) link

Are we meant to be in Romania or is the spooky old Romanian woman somewhere in Central Europe stock antiziganism?

Wag1 Shree Rajneesh (ShariVari), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:13 (six years ago) link

yes it's romania: vlad the impaler is mentioned in the first para

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:18 (six years ago) link

Aha!

Wag1 Shree Rajneesh (ShariVari), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:19 (six years ago) link

reptile is via late latin/old french, and before it got locked into scientific taxonomy meant any creature that creeps or crawls (hazlitt calls a spider a "little reptile")

i somewhat took its use of women to be a reference to long skirts where you can't see the walking legs (as you might say gliding except with possibly sinister purpose? saurely these ladies are entirely respectable in intent, but the word raises doubts)

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:24 (six years ago) link

i said hungary upthread bcz i'm an idiot

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:24 (six years ago) link

reptile is via late latin/old french, and before it got locked into scientific taxonomy meant any creature that creeps or crawls (hazlitt calls a spider a "little reptile")

i somewhat took its use of women to be a reference to long skirts where you can't see the walking legs (as you might say gliding except with possibly sinister purpose? saurely these ladies are entirely respectable in intent, but the word raises doubts)


yes right. and both the contexts wrt to women are somewhat uncomplimentary.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:27 (six years ago) link

lol saurely

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:27 (six years ago) link

i fear i may have opened up an app that comes with my laptop

mark s, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 14:30 (six years ago) link

A spectre is haunting literary fiction;

you shoulda killfiled me last year (Noodle Vague), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 19:29 (six years ago) link

between / a range is typical of his problems in that it acts like a pebble throwing your bike slightly off course; by the time you reach the end of the graf the cumulative effect has wrapped the bike completely around your neck


^ lol at this. a wobble that becomes uncontrollable.

Fizzles, Wednesday, 3 January 2018 20:30 (six years ago) link

i never really liked Virginia Woolf's dictum of writing being 'the right words in the right order', but tbf Lanchester does a lot of the wrong words in the wrong order:

Lanchester grabs Fizzles by the lapels.

"I'm writing all the right words but not necessarily in the right order... I'll give you that... I'll give you that, sunshine".

Whiney Houston (Tom D.), Wednesday, 3 January 2018 23:10 (six years ago) link

Fucking hell, this thread has been a magnificent read, thank you.

I've not read Capital (and never will) but I've always enjoyed Lanchester's economics coverage. The shitness of Capital (as presented here, admittedly) astounds me - the tin ear, the size of the undertaking and the implications of the ongoing lack of self-awareness. The lists!

Anyway, before discovering this thread, I did read the opening three or so paragraphs of the new story in the LRB and sweet christ. It was sort of anti-reading - repellent and ugly, like a quagmire of laboured sentences. I sort of assumed the fault was mine and that I was missing the thing he was satirising or parodying (I'm still a little bit convinced this must be the case) but having seen the takedowns on here, it's clearly not me, or not just me. Glancing back at it now, it's like a translation by someone with no aesthetic sense whatever - merely transcribing the job, as it were, without any recourse to nuance, to poetry or rhythm or humour. Is that undead nature of it - given the 'story' (and the location) the point, perhaps?

The shard-borne beetle with his drowsy hums (Chinaski), Saturday, 6 January 2018 19:01 (six years ago) link

Fizzles i know you are a busy guy with 8:15am meetings but I need you to get to the end of this story because it's sitting there in my head and i don't know what to do with it and whether you have an answer or we can work one out together or just share the pain idk but I can't shoulder this burden alone much longer.

Here comes the phantom menace (ledge), Sunday, 7 January 2018 13:56 (six years ago) link

am keenly aware of this. there’s going to be some activity this afternoon once i’ve done some bike repairs and baked a caek.

and picked my ass up off the sofa.

Fizzles, Sunday, 7 January 2018 14:07 (six years ago) link

i'm here for you ledge. no one should have to shoulder this burden alone.

Fizzles, Sunday, 7 January 2018 15:57 (six years ago) link

can't remember where i got up to. hang on.

Fizzles, Sunday, 7 January 2018 15:57 (six years ago) link


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